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FashionPursuitinColleges
Nowadays,thereisatrendwhichisaundeniablefactonthecampusthat,moreandmorestudentsarepursuitingfashion.Wearingcharacteristicclothesisgettingprevailingamongtheyouth.Otherfashionalthingssuchashair-dyeing,ringsarealsocanbeseen.
Manypeopleholdthepointsthatpursuitingfashiondoesnoharmtothereyoungmen.Theydohavetheflexiblechoicesonwhattheywearorhowtheybehave.Pursuitingfashioncanalsobelookedasapioneeringspiritwhichshowstheenergyandtheopen-mindthoughtsoftheyouth.
Butonthecontrary,therearealsosomepeoplehavetheoppositeideathat,pursuitingfashioniswastingtime.Theythinkthatthecollegesstudentsshouldputthestudyandcoursesonthetopoftheiragenda.Studyinghardistheonlyimperativeforthestudentandpoureffortsintothesefashionalthingsismeaninglessandworthless.
AsfarasIconcerned,itismeaninglesstocompetewithotherpeopleforpursuitingfashion.Butdressingyourselfpropertyisalsonecessarybecauseitdoesmakeyoucharming.
